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My first submission to the blog Webcomic Wars!. Members of the blog take turns creating a comic for our ever-continuing storyline and we can only post after another member has posted their comic. Currently, we're on a bit of a pause, until someone new joins us, that is. 
Webcomic Wars!
Webcomic Wars!
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Hey there!! You posted this comic on my dev blog about...6 months ago and I'm just now getting back to it >.<
Anyway!! I haven't read the next installment that you gave me, but...I'd like to comment on this one anyway and I'll give you some separate advice on the next one.
Good things: The idea to use faded ellipses is a very good symbolic outline to remind the audience that you are in a dream state!! Very original and very interesting! I have to admit that I'm totally and completely envious of your shading job! If you look at almost anything I've drawn in my gallery there's usually no shading!! It's very well done and the choice of color and brush are excellent for your characters!
Things to improve: While your faded ellipses are excellent symbolically your panels get a little crowded inside of them(especially the second to last panel)...Also your bubbles crowd up your drawings A LOT! I'm afraid I don't really have a suggestion on how to improve that other than to open up your panels...I admit that it might be a bit difficult because you've got a ton of text! Your proportions could also use some work, but you're on to a great start!!
Okay I'm going to take a look at the other comic you submited!!
Keep up the awesome work!!
Anyway!! I haven't read the next installment that you gave me, but...I'd like to comment on this one anyway and I'll give you some separate advice on the next one.
Good things: The idea to use faded ellipses is a very good symbolic outline to remind the audience that you are in a dream state!! Very original and very interesting! I have to admit that I'm totally and completely envious of your shading job! If you look at almost anything I've drawn in my gallery there's usually no shading!! It's very well done and the choice of color and brush are excellent for your characters!
Things to improve: While your faded ellipses are excellent symbolically your panels get a little crowded inside of them(especially the second to last panel)...Also your bubbles crowd up your drawings A LOT! I'm afraid I don't really have a suggestion on how to improve that other than to open up your panels...I admit that it might be a bit difficult because you've got a ton of text! Your proportions could also use some work, but you're on to a great start!!
Okay I'm going to take a look at the other comic you submited!!
Keep up the awesome work!!